Please criticize

But not on my spelling :stuck_out_tongue: . I’ve never really written a tune before,but i wanted to give it a try.Please, tell me what you think. http://webpages.charter.net/cooleyclan/newlow.MP3
Thanks,

Katie

Your link isn’t working for me, Katie.

Try this link Martin.

http://webpages.charter.net/cooleyclan/newlow.MP3


Katie, I am very impressed. Keep up the good work.

By the way, What have you named this tune?

Cheers,
Kathy :slight_smile:

Edited to ask the question

Very impressive for a first tune.

It took me into a dark and quiet place. Please post more. I bet we’ll all be watching for them.

Thank you very much for the encouraging words Kathy and Don. I haven’t named it yet. I’ve never been good at naming stuff. My cats (except for the most recent that the kids named) all have initials for names :blush: .I think the tune may sound better played just a little bit faster though. I think I’ll try writing another soon if inspiration grabs me :slight_smile: .
Katie

Hi Katie,

Got it this time!

It sounds like an Old Scottish Lament, I can imagine it pyaled on bagpipes, except for the first three notes - that interval between the second & third note jarrs a little. If it were my tune I’d change that bit, but it’s not my tune, it’s yours!

Nicely played!

How about, “Open My Wrists and let my Sadness Pour Like Blood Upon the Ground.”

Royce